Argumentative Essay: Introduction

marcel16 · Gast

Meine Frage:
In a highly developed soviety - like this one nowadays - it is of importance to get as much knowledge and skills as possible to withstand its growing pressure. Measured on that a person from a higher social background have much more possibilities to end up in educational success. Could in higher classes of society other problems spring up than in lower classes? And could this issues lead to an unsuccessful education as well as in lower classes?

Meine Ideen:
Ist diese Einleitung so in Ordung? Mit dem Rest des Essays habe ich keine Probleme, nur bei der Einleitung hapert's.

Mit dem "as well as" bin ich mir auch nicht so wirklich sicher. :D

für hilfe wäre ich sehr dakbar
grüße
marcel