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ScHÜleriN-18
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Hallöchen ^^ 
könnte mir jemand behilflich  sein und mir meinen Text auf Grammatik und Rechtschreibfehler korrigieren. Muss ihn am Montag abgeben :-S
Es ist wirklich sehr wichtig. Dankeschön im vorraus :-D
p.s. falls euch vllt noch eine gute und dazu passende Überschrift einfällt bitte einfach hinschreiben :-)
Hier bitte:
Please write a newspaper article on the topic „The two faces of California“, using today’s results. You should also think of a fitting headline. (das ist die Aufgabe)
Many slogans show only the good sides of California, that’s why people think that California is a dream land and living there is great. But the reality is different. These are only slogans to make California a perfect place for tourists. For the illegal Mexican immigrants it is a nightmare. They come through the borderline to California, because they dream about a better life, getting a job and earn more money there. When they arrive in California, they realize that their dream of America doesn’t come true. The Mexicans have to work hard 14 hours a day. They can’t see the beautiful sides of the state for example the lovely landscape and the beaches. The hot sun is making their work harder and makes them exhausted. They don’t even have clean drinking water when they are working on the farms. California is also known as the sunshine state, but there are many poor people who can’t afford to enjoy the sunshine. They have no free time and must only struggle for survival. So you can’t say, like the slogans show, that California is the home of the rich. |
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Goldenhind
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| Verfasst am: 24. Jun 2007 16:44 Titel: Re: Brauche dringen eine Korrektur für den 25.06.07... |
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| ScHÜleriN-18 hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | Many slogans show only the good sides of California, that is (keine Abkürzungen, das sit Umgangssprache) why people think that California is a dream land and living there is great. But the reality is different. These are only slogans to make California a perfect place for tourists. For the illegal Mexican immigrants it is a nightmare. They come through the borderline to California, because they dream of a better life, getting a job and earning more money there. When they arrive in California, they realize that their dream of America does not/will not come true. The Mexicans have to work hard 14 hours a day. They cannot see the beautiful sites (falls du Sehensürdigkeiten meinst, ansonsten "aspects" oder so) of the state for example the lovely landscape and the beaches. The hot sun makes their work harder and makes them exhausted. They do not even have clean drinking water when they are working on the farms. California is also known as the sunshine state, but there are many poor people who cannot afford to enjoy the sunshine. They do not have free time and must only struggle for survival. So you cannot say, like the slogans show, that California is the home of the rich [b](ist so imho ein wenig einseitig, schließlich leben da auch viele reiche Leute, sag lieber "not only" oder so). |
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Ulli
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| Verfasst am: 25. Jun 2007 08:40 Titel: Re: Brauche dringen eine Korrektur für den 25.06.07... |
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| Goldenhind hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | ScHÜleriN-18 hat Folgendes geschrieben: | | Many slogans show only the good sides of California, that is (keine Abkürzungen, das sit Umgangssprache) why people think that California is a dream land and living there is great. But the reality is different. These are only slogans to make California a perfect place for tourists. For the illegal Mexican immigrants it is a nightmare. They come through the borderline to California, because they dream of a better life, getting a job and earning more money there. When they arrive in California, they realize that their dream of America does not/will not come true. The Mexicans have to work hard 14 hours a day. They cannot see the beautiful sites (falls du Sehensürdigkeiten meinst, ansonsten "aspects" oder so) of the state for example the lovely landscape and the beaches. The hot sun makes their work harder and makes them exhausted. They do not even have clean drinking water when they are working on the farms. California is also known as the sunshine state, but there are many poor people who cannot afford to enjoy the sunshine. They do not have free time and must only struggle for survival. So you cannot say, like the slogans show, that California is the home of the rich (ist so imho ein wenig einseitig, schließlich leben da auch viele reiche Leute, sag lieber "not only" oder so). |
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@Goldenhind: meintest du: beautiful[b] sights  
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LG Ulli
Tomorrow is often the busiest day of the week.
Spanish proverb |
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Goldenhind
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Oh ja, natürlich, sorry. |
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ScHÜleriN-18
Anmeldungsdatum: 24.06.2007
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| Verfasst am: 25. Jun 2007 10:44 Titel: |
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ich danke euch sehr, dass ihr mir geholfen habt.
hat mir wirklich geholfen, habe gleich alles verbessert ^^[/b] |
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