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Gast01 · Gast

Hallo Leute,
ich sollte einen Letter über folgendes Thema schreiben: The birth rate in Germany become lower and lower. Why Germany do not introduce immigration on a larger scale? Give your own opinion on demogrphy!

Dear John,

Sorry I have not written for so long, but I have not enough time. Referring to your last letter in which you ask me why Germany does not encourage immigration on a larger scale I want to give you my own opinion on this topic.
In my view we already have a lot of immigrants in our country and many of them are not really integrated. Firstly, we have to solve this problem before wie introduce new immigration programmes in Germany.
Furthermore wie have a very high unemployment rate in Germany. If we allow more immigration this will not help to solve this problem. This wil cause the opposite and the unemployment rate will be rising.
On the other side, however, I find your opinion on encouraging immigration on a larger scale good, because this will be a good possibility to secure our social system and our retirement plan. But first we have to keep into mind that we need more vacancies on the labour market.
I will conclude this discussion by saying that our politicians have to encourage young people to make more babies. This will stabilize our social system.

Look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Gast01

Meiner Ansicht nach inhaltlich nicht gerade das Beste, aber noch im Rahmen oder? Sprache hört sich irgendwie komisch an, könnt ihr mir die Fehler vielleicht aufzeigen? Wie bewertet ihr das Geschriebene allgemein?

Schönen Gruss und DANKE